comments on "House Overlook", version 4

Kent suggests reducing the number of "overlooked"s, especially in the first stanza. "Doesn't add anything, gets annoying," he says.

I've read it over and at present I don't agree. Or rather, for me the repetition is interesting and not annoying. But this is version 4, after all; changes have been made up to now. I'm open to thinking about others.

Again I'm most dubious about the ending. Although I do prefer version 4 to version 3.

I made this version while dinner was imminent (Kent cooking) and the radio was on, I think. So just as I posted it was my first clear reading.